மாற்றங்கள்
கரையாது மறைத்துண்ணும் காகம்;
குறைந்து மறைந்த குருவியினம்;
காகித குப்பையுண்ணும் ஆவினம் !!
கருத்து அழுக்கான நீர்நிலைகள்;
வளமிழந்து குப்பையான நிலங்கள்;
மாசடைந்து விஷமான காற்று !!
அழியாமல் மாறாமல் எது ??
மாசில்லா மழலையின் சிரிப்பு -
நாமழிக்கும் அதனுலகம் என்பதறியாது !!
4 comments:
Excellent, Gowri...
Great stuff....I always liked your commitment to social issues. A poem portraying that makes it all the more interesting. keep up the good work.
Gowri...
This is going to be a long feedback.... First thing first, I can smell my style in your writing.... undaa illayaaa ?? Rather subconsciously I have inspired you (or showed you a better way of handling content part with a typical structure). Vaazhga Valamudan....
Secondly, I am stunned at the choice of examples... IT is really quite long back I heard crows.... (may be we have stopped noticing them OR never feed them ??). Similarly, reading the last line of first para, I feel bit optimistic AND grateful to God that we still have some thing called COW's milk inspite of the input. What a marvellous technology in the natural thing that he made !!
Last but not least, I differ from Sriram in his comment (you know it better !!). I am happy that you at last started building some artistic touch (in the form of poems) towards your concern for social issues !!! Crying hoarse at social issues at the pitch of the voice never works.... (I still remember your verbatim.... "anil podum siriya kaL"). A truely effective person uses the opportunity of external situation to express his creativity....!! Continue pannunGo Anna.... At least for this reason, I will visit your blog quite often.... (who wants to visit to a high HP person's house who is always shouting ???)
Sorry for belated response. You see, I am getting busier !!
Thanks Subbi Sir & Sriram.
Suchoo,
Thanks anna for your "feedback".
Firstly - Your style of writing ? Please explain what your style of writing is !! Insofar as my knowledge goes, I have started writing poems in my own way long long ago (I wrote my first poem when I was studying in X Std!!) - though not as frequently as you do. I am not that talented to grasp other's style as I see one. Do not take credit for things that does not exist !!
Secondly -
(i) "Havent heard crows" ?? Man - In which world are you living in ?? The whole city has turned a dust bin and it is crows everywhere. Crows no longer share their food and that is what I have mentioned in my poem. It is the "kuruvi" [sparrows] that we are missing. It is no longer seen in Chennai at all !!
(ii) Cow's milk - the paper eating cow's milk is too low in quality and it is the survival instinct that has made the cows eat papers. To say it in your style - whatever you eat, it is finally disposed off as "s***"!! குணமும் மணமும் மாறும் !! Nevertheless, it is always the "S***"!! Isn't it ??
Thirdly- I wanted to make a statement on your final para - but thought it better to leave your misplaced perceptions unanswered. Trying to register one's view about various issues is not "shouting" or "crying hoarse" !!
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